Change the ending of the story

 

Yogatama Mulyo Ardiansyah

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The story that i read is called “Cafe Brown” by Priyasha

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Recap of the story

This is the story between Simon and Violet, they are a couple... their love story begin when Violet came into Simon’s cafe, Cafe Brown. Simon is a Barrista and Violet as a customer. She always visit Simon’s cafe every Sunday and Simon always welcomed her by his Bright smile and make her a Coffee. But that day is Sunday, and Violet didn’t come so he feels lonely. Simon’s bestfriend which is also the Barrista, Alec. know Simon is waiting for the Violet and he said to Simon that Violet maybe busy. At that day, Alec has a date with his girlfriend then he leave the Cafe to Simon. A couple of minutes later, Alec call Simon that his girlfriend bestfriend Drunked at bar and Alec told to Simon that she is Violet. She totally drunk and need to go home. So, Alec suggested Simon to pick her up and bring her home. Simon later reach at the bar and pick her up. Tomorrow, Violet visit Simon’s cafe and she do a little intimate chat with him. Before she leave, Simon ask her to go dating with him tomorrow and Violet accept it. The following day, Simon is ready to pick her up in the front of her house by his car, she wearing a beautiful dress and makes Simon like it. They go to the bookstore because Simon know that Violet is like Books. After they spend their time in Bookstore they decided to go home. Simon told Violet that he already prepared something for her. So, he stop at the Cafe Brown and sit at the number 8th table. It is violet’s favorite table because she can see outside through the window. Simon is already decorating the cafe with fairy themes with stars above it and candles. Then, he makes a Coffee for her and starting to talk deeply with her. And finally, He proposed Her to become his girlfriend. With the shiny smile and tears Violet accepted it. Suddenly, Violet’s bestfriend which is Alec’s girlfrend, Anika call her to go back home because her parents visit her. Then, Simon decided to take her home. After they got there, Violet invite Simon to meet her parents. they surprised because Violet already have a boyfriend. Violet’s parents do a conversation with Simon. Simon talk seriously he want to be with Violet forever. Then, Her father accept their relationship. Finally, The story end.

 

The Reason why I changed the ending

because the original ending was too hanging and not fitting to be used as an ending. Is true, it looks like a happy ending, but it still doesn't deserve to be used as an ending

 

 

 

The Original ending

Suddenly, Violet’s bestfriend which is Alec’s girlfrend, Anika call her to go back home because her parents visit her. Then, Simon decided to take her home. After they got there, Violet invite Simon to meet her parents. they surprised because Violet already have a boyfriend. Violet’s parents do a conversation with Simon. Simon talk seriously he want to be with Violet forever. Then, Her father accept their relationship. Finally, The story end.

 

Another ending

Suddenly, Violet’s bestfriend which is Alec’s girlfrend, Anika call her to go back home because her parents visit her....(I changed from this part)

After that, Anika didn’t call Violet to go back home. Because her parents didn’t visit Violet. They still chatting and doing some romantic joke. Laughing each other and having fun. When afternoon comes, they decided to go home. Simon take Violet back to her home with his car. When they got there, Violet ask Simon to meet her parents next week. Then, Simon easily accept it.

The Next week Violet invite Simon to comes into her parents. in there, they do a lot of more excitement chat. And Her parents is planned to makes a Wedding party for both of them. It will held 4 months after.

4 Months later, wedding party held in the Violet’s house. There are Alec and Anika too... Simon and Violet starring their face and then kisses each other. They lived happy forever as a romantic couple. After that, The story End.

 

With this, the story can be called the ending. because getting married is the happiest thing for a couple.